Wednesday, August 16, 2017

The 100m sprint

L.G: precise words
S.O.S:
5 Adverbs, 5 Adjectives
5 speech, 5 said is dead

It was 6.30pm on a dark thursday night, I was getting ready for the 100m sprint. Everyone was watching with their beady eyes. “ On your marks,” declared my dad “set,” “boom,” went the great gun.

I started running rapidly, the 100m sprint wasn’t my thing but got there in the end. As I  hit the 50m mark I was tied with Camryn.

Then when we got to the 30m mark she quickly zoomed 1m ahead but I pushed my way ahead. I had to keep pushing so i stayed ahead, and that's what happened.

25m still ahead, 15m still ahead and 1m left to go.Done, I had won my tense race with camryn right behind and all the other girls behind her. “Well done,” began Camryn “You did so well,” I replied.      

5 comments:

  1. Great story Addi
    You meet your l.g and s.o.s
    great punctuation
    More description

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  2. direct speech
    tense
    dont have one

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  3. Cool Story
    Positive, Said Is Very Dead
    Positive, You used 5 adjectives
    N.S. Make it make more sense

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  4. tense
    direct speech
    ?i don't know

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  5. met your L.G and S.O.S
    lots of color
    don't know?

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