The 100m sprint
L.G: precise words
S.O.S:
5 Adverbs, 5 Adjectives
5 speech, 5 said is dead
It was 6.30pm on a dark thursday night, I was getting ready for the 100m sprint. Everyone was watching with their beady eyes. “ On your marks,” declared my dad “set,” “boom,” went the great gun.
I started running rapidly, the 100m sprint wasn’t my thing but got there in the end. As I hit the 50m mark I was tied with Camryn.
Then when we got to the 30m mark she quickly zoomed 1m ahead but I pushed my way ahead. I had to keep pushing so i stayed ahead, and that's what happened.
25m still ahead, 15m still ahead and 1m left to go.Done, I had won my tense race with camryn right behind and all the other girls behind her. “Well done,” began Camryn “You did so well,” I replied.
Great story Addi
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