jeff and bob
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Once upon a time there lived two Young men called jeff and bob. Jeff is boring but handsome and bob is funny but ugly they are Best friends. The lived in a village with Blacksmiths and farmers and all sorts.
One day While in a cave mining Jeff discovered diamonds. “whoa” yelled jeff Then Along Came Bob “whoa” muttered bob but suddenly 6 zombies ran in attacked and killed Bob and turned him into a zombie. They all turned on jeff “noooooooooooooo” wailed jeff. But suddenly jeff thought of good times with bob and smiled so bright that it vapourized the zombies and brang back bob “yay i'm back.” beamed bob “yippee” cheered jeff and they lived happily ever after.
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