Thursday, October 19, 2017

Dear Mr Peters
We are writing to you to recommend that you should choose a coalition with National. And here are three reasons why.

Firstly, National is putting down house prices which is great for poor families and homeless so they can look forward to to there first homes.

Secondly, National is going to put an $9.25 increase a week. Workers get about 85% of low income workers who lose about $520 a year in tax.

Thirdly, Labour is to busy warning about clean rivers and killing fishes habitat and national on the other hand is trying to put roofs of homeless poor and people that are poor.

There you have it three reasons why you should form a coalition with National.
  

6 comments:

  1. positive:stated your 3 reasons
    Positive:most punctuation
    next step:bit more deatail

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  2. good punctuation
    good ideas
    make your writing longer

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  3. good ideas
    good punctuation
    make sure it makes sense

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  4. good ideas
    punctuation
    longer paragraghs

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  5. good clear paragraphs
    clearly stated what you were writing about
    L.G?

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  6. lots of detail
    really descriptive
    add more puctuation

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