Tuesday, October 17, 2017

Dear Mr Peters

I am writing to you to recommend that you should join with National.

Firstly, National is going to give lower taxes to people so they have more money to spend on stuff they actually need like Groceries, Rent, Petrol, Houses, Apartments, Tickets, Internet and Phone bills.

Secondly, National is going to make no water bills, so people have more money in their pockets to spend on gifts for their friends and family.

Thirdly, Labor is going to make money to clean rivers and forget about all the people in need. Bill english is going to make money and help the parents raise their kids.

Well Mr Peters I have come to an end I really hope you will pick national.

     



6 comments:

  1. Positive: Used paragraphs
    positive: Great description
    next step: labour are not forgetting the people in need because they are lowering house prices


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  2. descriptive
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  3. punctuation
    good description
    labour is still helping people in need like amy said

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  4. good punctuation
    good paragraph
    people need clean water and river

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